Tremblingly
I start to write;
Immediately
A rhyme pops up,
“No, not now,”
I say quite stern;
It wags its tail
Just like a….baby canine.
Whining with its
Pup-like eyes,
I know that it
Just wants to play;
A perky yip,
A charming yap,
I grit my teeth
While I say…”Negative.
I must expand
My appetite
To more than rhymes,
Be less confined,
The only way
That I can train
The picky palate
Of my…mental faculties.”
Quite doggedly
I must resist,
Though I admit
That it’s quite hard,
So tempting but
I must refrain
And try to hold
My shaky…fortification.
I don’t know how,
I don’t know why,
My mind works
In the way it does;
I cannot even
Use the term
That answers why
With just…a single word
Without a tug
Upon my sleeve,
Like a compass
Pointing north,
A fruit that begs
Me just to taste
The flavors that
It can bring…into existence.
I hope you sense
The challenges
That free style verse
Can pose and tease
To someone who
Just loves to play
With pup-like rhymes
From fruitful…woody perennial plants.
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So free… rolls like a marble. Like it 🙂
Haha yes, like a marble with hexagonal sides. 🙂
Hahhah… ok. or a triangle 🙂
OMG! I have been struggling with free verse for so long…every line i write i want to couple it with a rhyme!! I actually wrote a free verse poem about it, which i may post later, i have tried a few times but they never seem right…
Great write, Cubby. The hardest part of writing free verse is flow..and that flowed so well, was entertaining and very relatable!
Lol well I thought perhaps a few people might get a kick out of it, especially rhymers. I adore the way you rhyme, but I just had the chance to read your free verse, and I loved that as well. I’m so glad you enjoyed this one!
Wow thank you so much! Coming from such an accomplished rhymer as yourself, that really means a lot!
The only thing I would say I’m accomplished at when it comes to rhyming is being able to distinguish sounds that are similar versus sounds that are not. I do that with faces too, but that doesn’t translate itself well into a visible talent since I can only draw stick figures. 😛
Ahaha, stick figures can still tell a story…thats why they are on traffic signs!! 😀
You are a very good poet, which is why i have a link to this blog on my Blog roll! 😀
I’m still confused. Not at the poem…at the world in general.
Well now, that’s perfectly understandable. The world in general is very confusing.
So tongue in cheek… 🙂
Ah and I was hoping for cheek in tongue. 😦
hahahah this is clever
Glad you got a kick out of it. 🙂
I love this…i have been struggling to break out of rhyming couplets for a while, and every line i cant help but want to pair it up with the next, even when i read i now read in that rhythm too. So i can totally relate to this and have to say you have done a great job to keep a flow going with out the use of rhyme.
I have been trying free verse for a couple of days, and you have inspired me to post mine now, and over the next few days….Thanks 😀
I look forward to reading the free verses to follow as I very much enjoyed your first one. I’m so glad I was able to inspire you to post yours as it would have been such a waste not to allow other people enjoy your talent and see what your brilliant mind is capable of. 🙂
Yeah, sorry about the two posts lol didnt think the first one sent 😛
Thank you, i really wouldnt have posted mine if i hadnt seen you take that step..and thank yuo so much for you kind words…
And here I thought you liked it so much you had to write more than one comment. *pop* Do you hear that? That was the sound of my bubble. 😛
Whether they are kind or simply true, I find it hard to tell the difference. 🙂
haha, sorry to burst your bubble! I’m sure some more will float on through soon 😀
Well whatever they are, they are very much appreciated, it took me a long time to have the bottle to put my poems online, and comments like yours help me carry on doing so. 😀
Fabulous
Hehe glad you think so. 🙂
Hahaha…I always feel a bit lazy when writing free verse, but apparently ’tis the thing to do these days! And as you’ve so aptly portrayed, it is harder than it looks….
It’s definitely the style that’s “in” according to the literary world. I find rhymes soothing to my mind, but I also enjoy reading free verse as well. Regardless of style, the most important part of writing is enjoying the process…or at least the product of the process. 🙂
I know I am not ready to try free verse. But You being a courageous young feline have taken on the challenge with gusto and conquered!
Haha I wasn’t really trying to conquer. I was just playing around and thought it would be a fun twist. I’m sure if you wanted to write a free verse, you would probably surprise yourself at what comes out. 🙂
Yeah I just might surprise everyone with what comes out of my warped brain!
Very clever 🙂 I like to switch between rhymes and free verse. I’ve also started using some poetry forms…so much fun!
I think having that kind of flexibility with your writing is a wonderful thing. It opens your mind to new possibilities and allows for greater creativity. I just love the way rhyming sounds though, and it is too fun to write for me to stop. 🙂
I think rhyming can be extremely powerful! I’m not very good at it though! lol
I’m not a writer or a poet … but I sure did love this! Fun!
Hehe I’m glad you enjoyed it. And I would dispute that you are not a writer, for you write very well on your blog. 🙂
Well, thanks so much for saying so … that’s so nice to read 🙂
You had me roaring with laughter on this one! I, too, have a tendency to be a rhyming poet, and, as you so aptly illustrate with your attempts at replacing a rhyming word that falls so naturally into place with a different word or phrase to replace it, it’s a hard “habit” to break!
I thought it be fun a fun twist on a rhyming poem. I’m glad it was able to make you laugh. 🙂
This is great – I love the timing of “. . . fortification” 🙂 —–Chagall
Hehe thanks, I had fun writing this one. 🙂
I keep coming back to this piece. I sooo relate to this problem (Gift!). I’m terrible at free verse, and often when I’m trying to focus my attention on other things, rhymes just pop into my head and won’t go away until I write them down, so I usually stop what I’m doing, write it down, and then I can focus again. I love the pacing of this poem and how you incorporate some rhymes throughout but then pull away from them. It really shows the playful tug and pull of trying not to rhyme while your brain is so naturally drawn to it.
It is indeed rather problematic for rhymers to branch out into free verse when they hear rhymes yapping in the background. I think the way you deal with it is perfect. Rhymes are very playful things that won’t stop bugging you until you throw them a bone to chase. 🙂
Hi Cubby, you do the word dance too, fluid flow even with juxtaposition. Free is the challenge for our intuition.
Peace and guidance
Q
Thank you so much for your kind words. 🙂