When you see no roads before you
And hopelessness begun,
Keep marching forward stubbornly
With hope where there be none.
When hope has flown too far to reach
And pain you can’t outrun,
Breathe in the pain then let it go
With faith where there be none.
When faith has hidden in the clouds
And leaves you with no sun,
In open hearts of love will you
See light where there be none.
When light is swallowed in despair
And life feels sadly done,
Have hope and faith to live and love,
And death there will be none.
Copyright 2013 Β© Sonya Annita Song
Fantastic..
Thank you kindly. π
Not sure i understand the last two lines but I think the rhythm is great. I also like how you structure it; using the word from last line of above section in the first line of the next, it links well together as a beautiful flow of thoughts π
The last 2 lines can be interpreted in several different ways:
1. There will be no death as in suicide when you have hope and faith to live and love.
2. There will be no death of the spirit while you are alive when you have the above attributes.
3. There will be no death of the attributes themselves.
4. There will be no death of God within your heart.
I thought it was possibly number 2 on your list but I just wasn’t sure π
just happen to be running on faith this moment in time, how timely your poem, it flows sweetly on like a perpetually flowing river, life giving
Thank you. Your words wash over me in warmth and kindness.
thanks
I feel better than I did before reading your poem. thanks!!
I am so glad to hear that. I would have felt terrible if you had felt worse. π
LOL, my awkward way of saying I had a shit morning and your poem made me feel better π
Glorious. To address the hopelessness of a life with out faith or love; and to that, I praise the God Almighty for so perfectly providing a way for us to rest in these things. You Know the Light of Truth, and for that, I applaud your recognition of this.
Thank you for your kind words. π
Simply beautiful.
Thanks Chelsea! π
Very beautiful, a genuisness of the truth and wisdom of simplicity.
You are too kind and generous with your words. I’m glad you enjoyed the piece. π
A poem to take to heart, thank you.
You’re welcome. π
Beautiful. Meaningful and hopeful.
Glad it was hopeful and not depressing! π
I don’t see much good formal poetry these days. The structure, the rhythm, the rhymeβthey all were well done, and I could almost hear it accompanied by music as I read. Beautifully lyrical. I really enjoyed it; thanks for sharing these words with the world. π
Like fibee5, I had a bit of trouble with the last stanzaβbut not the two final lines. Rather, the one just before it; ‘and life you would be done’ doesn’t sound right to my ears, but maybe it’s just me.
Thank you for your kind words. After careful consideration of the line you mentioned, I decided to change it to “And life feels like it’s done”. I take the feedback offered me very seriously and appreciate the time you took to offer it. π
I think that was the perfect change. It flows so well. Again, it really is a beautiful piece.
Thank you for letting me know what didn’t work for you. I know sometimes people are afraid of saying what they do not like for fear of offending, but ego must be sacrificed for the sake of betterment. π
tremendously uplifting! Brava!
Many thanks! Reowr!
I love this poem and have to do this so often. Thanks, Cubby!
Glad you enjoyed this one! π
I love: When hope has flown too far to reach
And pain you canβt outrun,
Breathe in the pain then let it go
With faith where there be none.
Its been my centering thought lately. More specifically: Release. My heart is at peace. Thanks for this! Its a great poem and a great reminder!
I’m so glad it can serve in that capacity. π
It works on so many levels. I see it as keeping on with the often difficult job of life against all odds for there is a higher purpose and unending life. Absolutely beautiful Cubby. You seem to garner gems from everywhere. x
You have such a good grasp of my writing. π
π x
Your words are great and thought provoking to me. Your words flow with gentle thoughts yet deep and meaningful. Congrats
I’m so happy you find meaning in my simple words. π
“When faith has hidden in the clouds and leaves you without sun” my fav lines. Awesome.
Many thanks! Glad you liked it! π
This is a poem to put on my pillow! Very well said…the only thing I know to overcome blue days it to plod on believe that the sun will come out again. Sometimes a friend’s kind words will shake the mirky waters and so some light infiltrates and sometimes it can be a photograph of some pinquins. Great poem and very wise.
Thanks Bastet. My heart was feeling heavy after reading some dark things, and I felt compelled to write this.
I’m sorry you had dark news. This is the changing of the season and things are more difficult until the change is complete. I hope you are happier today.
I feel better after writing the Ghazal. Even the name makes me smile as it reminds me of a gazelle. π
Superb.
Thank you kindly. π
With all the sickness and “stuff” going on with my husbands and I parents this one really made me cry! Quite a comfort to have read this! Thanks my dear friend!
I am so sorry to hear about the unpleasantness going on around you in your life right now, but I’m glad you could find some comfort in my words.
I love the “never give up” message–I’m a strong proponent of it.
For sure. π
Terrific stuff.
Really like the repetition and continuation.
Very clever – and very good.
Thank you so much for your kind words. I’m so glad you liked the poem! π
Wonderful! I absolutely love this poem.
Thank you kindly. I’m so glad you feel that way! π
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This is so beautiful; I just had to share it.