Songs in minor key, strings of a guitar
Will weave a melody of tears that we
Cry at the fading of a brilliant star.
When we were young, we tried to use a jar
To capture light in bright notes of the sea,
Songs in minor key, strings of a guitar,
Like waves of darkness coming from afar,
Would let us hear the winds in harmony
Cry at the fading of a brilliant star.
Trapped deep within the frame of every bar
Swell up and down each tearful memory,
Songs in minor key, strings of a guitar
Stitch somber chords and leave an angry scar,
While drowning in the sky, I shamelessly
Cry at the fading of a brilliant star.
It does not matter who or what you are,
You’ll hear the earth cry when it sets you free
Songs in minor key, strings of a guitar,
Cry at the fading of a brilliant star.
Reowr 
So beautiful Sonya! I love Villanelle but rhytym is not my strong point and rhymes need a nice seamless flow. You are a master of rhyme!
It was rather tricky but quite fun. I am so glad you liked it. Very much appreciate your kind words. 🙂
Brilliantly done! You’ve the heart and soul of a troubadour!
The next post will be the challenge post with instructions and an example. It is a rather tricky form, so I want to make it as clear as possible. Glad you liked this one. 🙂
Very well done…the trick is not so much in the rhyme, but the two refrains. I’ll be looking forward to your challenge post 😉
keep going you are brilliant
According to my poem, we are all brilliant. 🙂
clever answer
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Sounds wonderful. I was just at your writing one and thought it looked fantastic. 🙂
Read like a minstrel’s tune, masterfully done Cubby!
A minstrel would be a wonderful thing to be! Now if only I could sing and play an instrument well… 🙂
wonderful Villanella., well done.
groetjes, Francina
Thank you very kindly. 🙂
Not sure about the earth crying when it sets me free. I suspect it might just blow a raspberry…
For you, just possibly. 😛
Very beautiful, I adore villanele,but have not yet dared to try and reading fabulous poems like yours make me wanna just take my hat of to you and bow.
If you don;t mind me saying, I read this outloud, and it seemed to me that this part:”Stitching up the pain but leaving a scar,” was a bit out of the rhytm, it was a bit harder for me to read it compared to the rest of the poem. Hope you don’t mind me saying, the poem is still very fabulous!This was my favourite sentence:”Songs in minor key, strings of a guitar,”
Hmm, I was trying to purposefully break up the rhythm as I thought it might be too monotonous as I have been advised against this, but this line was also really bugging me. Therefore, I have changed it. I am so happy you let me know what you like and what you do not as I tend to second-guess myself when I think someone is making a valid point. 🙂
And I thought the ghazal was hard…Nicely done!
There’s a challenge coming up tomorrow. 😉
Nicely done! I also love villanelles. Here’s one of mine, which I posted on my blog, if you are interested to read it. I strongly prefer rhymed and structured poetry over free verse, as I gather you do as well!
Untangling: A Villanelle | A Bringer of New Things
https://abringerofnewthings.wordpress.com/2013/08/27/untangling-a-villanelle/
It is very lovely. I find rhyme and structure to be very soothing to my mind, and I am glad there are others who still enjoy writing and reading traditional verse. 🙂
Awesome words, awesome rhythm, awesome all the way around!
Ah, so glad you thought so! Thank you so much! 🙂
It is my pleasure.
Very nice. I’ve recently read a few villanelles and have been drawn to the form. I’ll have to give it a try. You make it look easy, though I know it’s difficult. Just lovely.
I will be posting a challenge tomorrow with instructions and an example which will hopefully make it easier to write if you choose to do so. 🙂
very pretty Cubby, and bittersweet. well done! 🙂
Glad you liked it! 🙂
Love the whole piece– so very musical– wonderful images, too.
Thank you kindly. I’m so glad you enjoyed it. 🙂
Fabulous job on this–love it!!
Glad you enjoyed it! 🙂
This is one of your best. I should go on, but I won’t. It dwarves the on I wrote not to long ago. Bravo.
I loved the villanelle that you wrote. I thought it was very beautiful. If you don’t mind, may I post and/or link it on the challenge blog?
Of course
Awesome! Thank you. 🙂
This is absolutely beautiful and dreamy. Love it!
That makes me super happy you think so! 🙂
Lovely and fluid and musical. Adore this one!
I’m so glad you enjoyed this! 🙂
It is a challenging form but I enjoyed it when I tried my hand at it..
This is brilliant… !
I’m so glad you think so! 🙂
Beautiful, Cubby! You truly have a gift for writing poetry!
Ah, that is what I think of your writing as well. 🙂
Thank you! 🙂
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Great Villanelle!
Beautiful 🙂
Many thanks. 🙂
It has a flowing rhythm, like the swelling of the sea. I love reading your poems.
Thank you, that is such a lovely thing to say. I am so glad you enjoy reading my poems. 🙂