Exchanging Time

Silky sadness softly streaming,
Someone somewhere sorrows sadly
Certain yesterday is sleeping,
Nestled, settled, sodded soundly.

Somewhere someone saved her swiftly
Sacrificing precious someday,
Exchanging space so selflessly,
Stays slumbering in yesterday.

51 thoughts on “Exchanging Time

  1. Interesting rhyme…apart from the story it tells…all those s’s greatea an interesting sss sound…liked it

    1. I like the sound of s’s. Glad you liked it! 🙂

      1. sssssssssssso lovely! 😀

  2. WOW. That’s it–I’m stunned, speechless (and yes, I love the alliteration very much too).

    1. It is fun to alliterate! Although I tend to be a little extreme when I do it. 🙂

      1. Oh no, “extreme” is the way it should be done! Caddo’s Rule…

  3. Lovely poem. The title really caught my eye! Well done.

  4. Sad yet scintillating, stylish, superb piece Cubby. =)

    1. Aw, thank you so much. I love your alliteration too!:)

  5. So sad, so sweet, so superbly summarized. ((stands,,,,,applauSe))

    1. Lol you alliterate like you were born alliterating! Well done! 🙂

  6. lulupoetrycorner October 10, 2013 — 3:42 am


  7. Very beautiful Cubby, as always- my mysterious friend…

    1. Thank you so much, Ellie. 🙂

  8. Read it several times, it continues to have an ineffable transporting quality. It is “somewhere” “yesterday” I can only reach by reading it again.

    1. What a beautiful comment. Thank you so much. 🙂

  9. Whew! a whole poem in alliteration! Syllables so softly sounding
    Sadness in a single sigh,
    Second thoughts, I sense surrender:
    A stay in stasis is to die.

    1. Ooooo! Very nice! I love the way you alliterate! 🙂

  10. Silky sadness softly streaming… sigh

  11. Wow, I love the alliteration in this poem!

    1. The s’s did all the work! I just filled in the space around them. 🙂

      1. Well, you did a fantastic job filling in those spaces! 🙂

        1. Lol you are impervious to deflection! Thank you, Miranda. 🙂

  12. Incredible! Well done Cubby!

  13. Sublimely sibilant. May I Reowr! at you? :)x

    1. Lol you may reowr if you wish. It is not trademarked…yet. 😉

      1. Oh, good. It’s such an effective way of expressing approval. :)x

  14. This is so bitter-sweet…

    I also love these two lines : “Certain yesterday is sleeping,
    Nestled, settled, sodded soundly”. I always enjoy your creativity – you really know how to think outside of the box 🙂

  15. nicely written one.

  16. I love the first stanza a lot!!! All of it…very orginal. “Sorrows sadly”, “yesterday sleeping”, “sadness streaming”: amazing!! Where ever you got your inspiration from must be one heck of a something.

    1. Language itself can be very inspiring. I’m so glad you enjoyed this! 🙂

      1. So very true. There are so many ways you can use the same word to express yourself.

  17. beautiful. I read this earlier and again tonight…. another song friend. I would love to see this one develop with further stanzas. one of my favorites so far.

    1. It was a struggle to even get the second stanza out. The first one came easily, but I thought it might be a little incomplete so I added a second one. Any more stanzas and I think I would be like a fish on land, gasping for air, wondering why in the heck I left the water for so long. In short, I am all alliterated out for now. 😦

  18. I can appreciate this challenge but I do love this poem especially the Silky sadness softly streaming,…I feel the flow of sadness…just love it!

    1. I’m so glad you enjoyed it! That was the line that got stuck in my head, and then everything else tumbled out after it, some not so gracefully lol. 🙂

      1. A few lines like that should be given to police officers when stopping drunk drivers to read as a test…ahahahaha

        1. Lol that would be hilarious! 🙂

  19. This piece of yours is strange to speak but not to listen to –
    so splendidly and exquisitely executed. One word? Gorgeous! ❤

    1. And I didn’t think people would like it! Thank you so much, Jashaél! 🙂

  20. Superbly sweet sans saccharine 🙂

    1. Now that’s what I call alliteration! 🙂

      1. Lol and embarassingly misspelled 🙂

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