The Darker Side of Pain

I stabbed the moon to watch it bleed
Because it mocks me with its glow,
The way it shines for all to see;
Does it feel pain? I burned to know.

I flew up into space one night,
A blazing sword within my hand,
And thrust it deep without a fight
Into the dusty, barren land.

And when I saw the blood flow free
Along the craters of its face,
I felt ashamed, and tenderly,
I gave the moon a cold embrace.

For I’m a shadow with no light,
I’m lost within the darkness too,
And now the moon, no longer bright,
Could also feel the pain I knew.

2019 Β© Sonya Annita Song

143 thoughts on “The Darker Side of Pain

  1. Gor. Ge. Ous.

    Bet you didn’t know that word had 3 syllables lol.

    Loved this. I write about the moon a lot. So this was a perfect read for my morning.
    Felt every word.
    X

    1. Thank you for your kind words. The moon is definitely a great source of inspiration. πŸ™‚

  2. That was very clever! Love it!

    1. Thanks, Kevin! Glad you enjoyed it. πŸ™‚

  3. Aw…so sweet and heartbreaking too.

    1. Pain begets pain. That was almost the title for this poem.

      1. Write that poem, please!

        1. Well, technically, it has been written. I can change the title if you want…

          1. Lol! No.
            I sense if you take that title, you’ll come up with a whole new poem

            1. You’re trying to make me work hard today. I need to take a cat nap. πŸ˜‰

              1. Laughing.
                Go take a nap pretty kitty.
                Poetry can wait xx

      2. So true. A hurt soul hurting another just to let them know things are not fine… This was such a beautiful work, Cubby. Thank you for sharing it. πŸ™‚

        1. I just woke up from my cat nap. I love naps. What are we talking about? Oh, yes, thank you for reading! πŸ™‚

    1. You are too kind. I’m glad you liked it. πŸ™‚

    1. Me like that you like. πŸ™‚

  4. Cubby, this one reflects real pain. Dare I ask where it comes from?

    1. Of course you may ask. This poem was based on observation of human nature rather than the result of direct experience, that people do not want to be alone in their suffering. I often see pain in vicious cycles, victims becoming abusers or people lashing out at others to hurt them because of their own hurt, and this is a poem reflecting that cycle.

  5. When it comes to describing pain, acceptance and empathy, this poem by far wins all medals. Fabulous, marvelous, scintillating- I am out superlatives 😊

    1. Lol you are really far too gracious. If I could incorporate 10% of your poetic vocabulary and usage in my poems, I would be very happy. πŸ™‚

      1. And you are too kind. 🌸🌸

    1. You give strength to my words through your meaningful interpretation.

  6. This is a wonderful piece. Everything right from beginning to end…and I felt the moon bleed and fill it’s craters with pain equal to yours

    1. Craters of pain… ah, I wish I had used that in the poem. You have a wonderful way with words. πŸ™‚

      1. There you go again Sonya…always grateful for your kind words.

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  7. Beautiful Sonya! I’vebeen thinking a lot about swords. They are a great spiritual weapon that help our direction!πŸ€—

    1. Thank you Jordy! Swords are symbolic of so many things, which makes them wonderful to use as metaphors. πŸ™‚

  8. I’m at loss for words. I cannot speak. But I’ll find them later and take a peek πŸ˜πŸ‘

    1. Love the way you rhyme! πŸ™‚

      1. Truely your poem was the first thing I read. Turned on the system, prompted WP e voila! Beautifully written very thought provoking. OH and thanks πŸ’œπŸ˜Š

        1. Hehe well, I’m glad reading my rather dark poem first thing in the morning didn’t sour your mood. πŸ™‚

          1. πŸ˜‚πŸ€£πŸ˜‚ no but it made me think. Then THOUGHTS came through.

    1. Thank you very kindly! πŸ™‚

  9. Love the perspective. Very tender!

    1. Thank you so much. Your kind words are greatly appreciated. πŸ™‚

    1. I’m so glad you thought so. Thank you. πŸ™‚

      1. I love the use of personification with the moon . The moon is such a great asset to poetry at times . It can be used in so many ways . You used it beautifully πŸ™‚ thanks for sharing it !!!

        1. And thank you for reading and commenting with such lovely words. πŸ™‚

  10. Sad and beautiful imagery. I absolutely love your poetry!

    1. Aww I’m so happy to hear that. Thank you so much. πŸ™‚

  11. Hi, C. I bet the moon never whimpered; he just watched you soberly. He’s such a cool-headed fellow.

    1. His cool-headedness is what annoyed the character in the poem so much.

      1. lol, Like some senior Boss-man, I presume.

  12. Wow! This is excellent :O) x

    1. Thank you kindly. I’m glad you enjoyed it. πŸ™‚

  13. Love this write! Perfect title selection. – B

    1. The title was almost “Pain Begets Pain,” but this title sounded much cooler hehe. πŸ™‚

  14. i’ve never seen such a beautiful portrayal of pain. I’m amazed

    1. Thank you so much for your lovely words. πŸ™‚

  15. Lots of meaning to contemplate with this one. Very nice. πŸ™‚

    1. Words only take on meaning through interpretation, so thank you for reading in a meaningful way. πŸ™‚

      1. You’re welcome! The meaning has to be there in the first place, otherwise it would just be random. Have fun.

  16. Raw and powerful emotion in beautifully crafted and controlled verse; thank-you for sharing. It is an act of alchemy to make something good out of pain.

    1. That is an interesting interpretation and one I will not refute as it is the reader who creates meaning from the words they read. πŸ™‚

      1. I think being able to find creativity from a place of pain can be an act of alchemy; of elevating not the dark emotion itself, but our understanding of it and ourselves.

        1. I wasn’t sure what you meant by “to make something good out of pain,” so thank you for clarifying. Your eloquent explanation sheds light on your statement so that it makes complete sense now. πŸ™‚

          1. sorry for the confusion

            1. No worries. I confuse myself all the time. πŸ™‚

  17. Very well done. Excellent.😊

  18. Intense. Thought provoking. Wow! I’m still short of words. Beautiful!

    1. That you think so makes me very happy. Thank you. πŸ™‚

  19. Absolutely beautiful, this poem has a very cinematic quality to it.

    1. That’s very kind of you. Thank you so much. πŸ™‚

  20. Ooh… violent. Kitty brought out the claws for this one.

    This is beatiful, Cubs. I got chills. I still have chills coursing through me. Not just because it’s winter. This poem is exquisite.

    1. *whiskers twitch* You are far too kind. Thank you for being so gracious. πŸ™‚

      1. I am not too kind. You are good. This is beautiful. Thank you for returning to blogging and sharing your talents. I’m glad I found your blog. I don’t remember how I found it, but I’m glad I did.

        1. You really make my whiskers twitchy. But I am grateful that you enjoy reading my writing. I enjoy reading yours as well. πŸ™‚

          1. I’m glad the enjoyment is mutual. πŸ‘–I’m not good at emojis.

            1. Yeah, I wasn’t good at emojis either, but it seems like the thing to do.

              I found a few more cool cat emojis: πŸ±β€πŸ‘“πŸ±β€πŸ‘€πŸ±β€πŸš€
              From left to right: hipster cat, ninja cat, and astrocat.

              I’ve been doing this instead of writing my poem for today. Looks like it’s going to be a prompt after all.

              1. Those are some nice emojis. Maybe your next challenge should be an emoji story challenge. A hipstet cat, a ninja cat, and an astrocat walk into a bar…

                Sometimes it’s O.K. to give your brain a rest. I was semi-productive today. I caught up on blog stuff, lots of likes and comments all around. I got through a couple chapters of my rewrite. I even made some significant changes. As a topper, I found a pants emoji. Why is there a pants emoji? So I can relay that I’m dressed without using words? “Hey! We goin out 2nite! Dont 4get πŸ‘–this time.”

                1. That’s a perfectly good use for that particular emoji, especially for nudists. It’s nice that you were able to catch up with your blog and do some rewrites. All in all, sounds quite productive! πŸ™‚

                  1. Where do nudists keep their phones?

                    1. Maybe they use those armband things for music players. And they must carry some kind of wallet or purse. Being a nudist doesn’t mean you can’t have any accessories, does it?

                    2. I don’t know. I’ve only tried it in the shower. I guess it would depend on one’s level of dedication. I bet there’s always that one guy, “Whoa! No armbands, bro.”

                      Why would they need wallets or purses? Where are they shopping? I’ve seen some ridiculous attire at Wal-Mart but never nudists. No shirt. No shoes. No service. That pretty standard, right?

                      What do nudists do in the winter? Do they go south?

                    3. I thought they had nudist colonies with restaurants, movie theaters, rec centers, and other retail stores.

                    4. I’ve heard of nude beaches and nudist colonies, but restaurants. The health inspector’s not going for that, I assume. I am very ignorant in the ways of the nudist, and I was born one. Sometimes I tell people I was born wearing a little suit complete with bow tie and top hat. My mom refutes that claim. 🎩

                    5. I would believe it. Then again, I’m pretty gullible. πŸ™‚

                    6. Me too. I’m too honest. I don’t always recognize deception.

                    7. That’s a good thing as it means you’re not completely jaded. πŸ™‚

                    8. Not completely. It could also be that I don’t

                    9. …read people well. Or type well on my phone as I’m drifting off for an 8-hour nap.

                    10. That makes a lot more sense now. I didn’t know how to respond to that last comment hehe. Naps are good for you. πŸ™‚

                    11. πŸ±β€πŸ‰πŸ–Ό

                    12. So, I just realized that all these emojis look different in different places. On my phone, mine was a snoring guy. On my computer, it looks like he’s crying. I had to got to the post page to try to figure out why I posted a crying emoji. Yours look way different on the phone than on the computer and different still from the drop-down notification menu. At least, I’m getting a similar message from yours. I officially no longer trust emojis nor will I follow through on my plan to make them my official language.

                    13. Yeah, I noticed that the emojis were all different too. Definitely not good for an official language, although you could call them dialects. πŸ™‚

                    14. You’d have to watch the translation. There’s a big difference between sleeping and crying. Unless you’re crying yourself to sleep.

                    15. Hmm, that sounds interesting. Now I’m curious.

                    16. I’m a little scared I’m going to send you a thumbs up or something, and it’s going to come through as a spanking. You’re like, “Whoa! Dude, I don’t know you like that.” Then, I think thumbs up means something way different in Canada.

                    17. A thumbs up sign can mean one of three things:
                      1. You are trying to hitchhike.
                      2. You are telling someone they did a good job.
                      3. You are a child playing the “7-Up” game.

                      I’m sure there are more things it could mean, but these were the only ones I could think of right now.

                    18. I hated Heads Up 7-Up. Are adults not allowed to play that game? Or do they not use their thumbs?

                    19. No idea. I thought it was a pretty stupid game, personally.

                    20. How did we go from talking about your poem to Heads Up 7-Up, with emojis and nudists in between?

                    21. I think the emojis led us there. If I recall correctly, it started with your pants emoji.

                    22. Thanks for riding the tangent with me. That was fun.

                    23. Lol it was an interesting ride. πŸ™‚

                    24. I have a desire to inspire. πŸ™‚

                    25. Desire fulfilled. You have been inspiring me with your prompts, challenges, and conversation for a monthish. πŸ‘

                    26. I like ish’s. I’m truly glad I could be a source of inspiration. πŸ™‚

                    27. I like some ish’s, though I spend way too much time doing dishes.

                      Me too. You got me writing poetry again, which got me branching out to other challenges, which has brought a lot more attention to my blog.

                    28. It’s definitely a great way to get attention, but it does take a lot of time to do all those challenges.

                    29. Yeah, it does.

                      I think I need more inspiration, Cubs. I tried your challenge and prompt last night. I had nothing.

                    30. You and me both. I’ve got nothing for this one. I’m still trying though.

                    31. It’s a bad sign if you can’t come up with something for your own prompt.πŸ™ƒ

                    32. Hehe finally got something out

                    33. Good job! I’ll read it in a few days, when I catch up again.

                    34. It will still be there. πŸ™‚

  21. We’re all lost in the darkness. Great work. Beautiful words!

    1. Your kind words are greatly appreciated. πŸ™‚

  22. This is amazing!!! Loved every word. Thank you! ❀

    1. Thank you so much for your kind words. πŸ™‚

    1. Thank you so much! That makes me very happy. 😊

    1. Thank you! I’m glad you thought so. πŸ™‚

  23. Great Poem!

    I wrote one similar to the category of pain.

    Feel free to check it out: https://mbspoetry.wordpress.com/2018/12/09/insufferable-storm-2/

    πŸ™‚

    1. It’s a bit heavy, but I like playing around with the words.

      1. Playing around with words leads to creative results. πŸ™‚

    2. It is definitely much more direct in its approach. Very appropriate title. πŸ™‚

  24. Cubby,
    After seeing your work, I am even more pleased and grateful for the β€œlike” you just gave to my poem, β€œThoughts Engendered by Pajamas With Feet.” I am primarily a nonfiction writer with eclectic tastes, but the encouragement I’m receiving from you and other poets is persuading me to search further for my poetic muse. You have some wonderful stuff here, and I’m now pleased to be a follower.
    Cheers!
    Annie

    1. Thank you, Annie, for your encouraging words. How can anyone not like a poem with a title like that? Prose is like walking hand in hand with a book, whereas poetry is like dancing with the wind. A writer is only ever limited by their own imagination. πŸ™‚

  25. When you cry, you cry alone. Long time cat, glad you’re still writing. Your poems are so smooth to read.

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