Perfecting Creation

If I had the power of creation,
Strength borrowed from the essence of the earth,
I would listen to the beat of every heart
And feel the pain of every death and birth.

I’d taste the lonely tears that fall from heaven
To quench the thirsts below that never die;
I’d comprehend the reasons for the suffering
And all the answers to the baffling why.

The desire to create a perfect world
Would lessen as I start to understand
That beauty isn’t in the earth’s perfection
But in its frailty and will to stand.

2019 Β© Sonya Annita Song

Thank you to those who participated in the Prompt: Creation. I loved reading all of them and hope you enjoyed the creation process as much as I loved the results. πŸ™‚

73 thoughts on “Perfecting Creation

  1. Beautiful Sonja and somehow hopeful. Would you consider posting it for the Poet By Day Prompt? The prompt is about compassion. Take a look. The prompt just came out and you have a week. πŸ’—

    1. I looked at the submission guidelines. I don’t think my writing style would be a good fit for them based on the examples that they gave of the type of poetry they like. I appreciate the suggestion! πŸ™‚

      1. ? It’s just an exercise Its ok lol They accept any style. No biggie …πŸ˜πŸ‘

    2. I was using the wrong exercise. The one I was suggesting is about the environment.

      1. Lol okay I can’t keep up 😝

  2. Your rendition was the best. The compassionate you

    1. I don’t think mine was the best, but I appreciate that you would think so. You are too gracious. πŸ™‚

      1. I loved your rendition – and it is possible to have varied opinions

  3. Beautiful.

    1. That’s very kind of you. Thank you. πŸ™‚

  4. Beautifully crafted poem with a lot of depth. I loved it

    1. Thank you so much. Your words mean a lot to me. πŸ™‚

  5. So wonderfully heart-felt written! ❀

    1. I’m so glad you thought so. πŸ™‚

  6. Beautiful and inspiring. So much goodness in the world! Thanks for sharing ☺

    1. And thank you for reading so graciously. πŸ™‚

  7. So touching in its depth.

    I love this:
    “…I’d taste the lonely tears that fall from heaven
    To quench the thirsts below that never die;”
    Feels like it should be set to music xx

    1. I’m so glad you enjoyed my words. Thank you for your lovely comment. πŸ™‚

      1. My pleasure. Really enjoying your poems

        1. That makes me very happy. Thank you. πŸ™‚

  8. Finding redemption through understanding tragedy. The Ancient Greeks would approve.

    1. There cannot be one without the other. Life strives towards balance, but balance does not mean harmony.

      1. I just happened to be reading Wordsworth’s Intimations of Immortality just now and came across these very relevant and beautiful lines:

        Though nothing can bring back the hour
        Of splendour in the grass, of glory in the flower;
        We will grieve not, rather find
        Strength in what remains behind;
        In the primal sympathy
        Which having been must ever be;
        In the soothing thoughts that spring
        Out of human suffering…

        …Thanks to the human heart by which we live,
        Thanks to its tenderness, its joys, and fears,
        To me the meanest flower that blows can give
        Thoughts that do often lie too deep for tears.

        1. Ah what breathtaking verse. Thank you for sharing those beautiful lines with me. πŸ™‚

    1. Thank you! I’m glad you enjoyed it. πŸ™‚

  9. I would define, in brief, the poetry of words as the rhythmical creation of Beauty. Edgar Allan Poe

    Beautifully well expressed my friend. πŸ™‚

    1. Great quote! Love Edgar Allan Poe. And thank you for your kind words. πŸ™‚

      1. You’re very welcome my friend.

        I figured the quote would fit perfectly to your poem creation. πŸ™‚

        1. It does. Thank you for your thoughtfulness. πŸ™‚

  10. Gorgeous, profound writing!

    1. That’s very kind of you. Thank you so much. πŸ™‚

  11. very touching! draws you into the depths! thank you for liking mine as well. humbled.

    1. Many kind thanks. And it was my pleasure to like yours. πŸ™‚

  12. Wow, Cubby….a different and far more profound take on the subject than mine! Beautiful!

    1. I’m glad you liked it! I really enjoyed yours too. πŸ™‚

  13. Nicely done, Cubby. “…the power of creation” may be best left to something better than ourselves or even alone. Love it!

    1. Thank you, Garret. I really liked how yours felt like you would bring Judgment Day. πŸ™‚

  14. You capture wonderful and stirring images in your poems. Very powerful and inspiring pictures in my mind. You truly have a gift!

    1. Thank you. You are too kind. You have a gift as well in your strong narrative poetry. πŸ™‚

  15. This poem is wonderful Cubby. I love the message and the the rhythm, it all flows very well together.

    1. Thank you so much. I appreciate your kind words. πŸ™‚

      1. You’re welcome CubbyπŸ™‚

    1. That makes me very happy! πŸ™‚

  16. Lovely piece of work. As usual your rhythm is amazing.

    1. That’s very kind of you. Thank you. πŸ™‚

    1. Thank you so much! I’m glad you enjoyed it. πŸ™‚

  17. You are amazing, Cubs. I started working on a poem for this prompt, but it’s not nearly as good as yours. I’ll post it, if I’m not too intimidated by the amazing poem I just read and reread. That’s why I try not to read the other submissions before I write mine.

    1. You have a wonderful style of writing that you should be proud of. No one else can write quite like you. πŸ™‚

      1. Thank you. See? Somehow you took a compliment on your beautiful poem and turned it into a compliment for me. This is about how good your poem is.

  18. Ouuhhh I like this piece! It reflects fantastic and stubborn optimism in spite of all the dark and bleakness around us. Profound indeed!!

    1. Many thanks for your kind words. I’m glad you enjoyed it. πŸ™‚

  19. This is beautiful. 🌼

    1. Thank you, Jen. πŸŒΈπŸ’œ

      1. You’re welcome πŸŒΌπŸ’œ

  20. Beautifully written Cubby, with deeply expressed passion! Love it πŸ’œ.
    I know if you had those powers, there is no doubt, in my mind you would do just that.
    Continue allowing your compassion to shine and write!

    1. Aww you are so sweet. Thank you so much for such lovely words. Your compassionate soul shines with every word you write.πŸ˜ŠπŸŒΈπŸ’š

      1. You are welcome, the pleasure is certainly mine.
        I’m humbled by your kind words!
        Thank You 😊

          1. πŸ˜‡πŸŒ·πŸ’œπŸ€—πŸŒ·

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