Losing Sense of Self (Villanelle)

I see the worries in your eyes;
In lines above I see the fear.
One day I hope you’ll realize

You carry demons in disguise
Who blur the self to seem unclear.
I see the worries in your eyes

And how you always agonize
On image, ways you may appear.
One day I hope you’ll realize

Green tongues that always criticize
Speak shallow words, ring insincere.
I see the worries in your eyes,

Your willingness to compromise
Identity and disappear.
One day I hope you’ll realize

You’ve lost your sense of self to lies,
A shame since you’re its engineer.
I see the worries in your eyes;
One day I hope you’ll realize.

2019 Β© Sonya Annita Song

Want to learn how to write a villanelle?Β  Click here for the villanelle challenge and give it a try! πŸ™‚

62 thoughts on “Losing Sense of Self (Villanelle)

  1. Damn beautiful and you know so many forms of poetry. I am in awe with your talent

    1. You have the content, regardless of form, and that is what matters most. πŸ™‚

      1. You are so very kind and sweet 😊🌸❀️

          1. 😊❀️❀️

  2. Excellent write, and such a good point across with a villanelle that’s not easy to do..

    1. That’s very kind of you. I almost lost myself while writing it. πŸ˜‰

  3. So good. I love this one.

    1. I’m so glad you enjoyed this one. πŸ™‚

    1. You are too kind. Thank you. πŸ™‚

      1. You are most welcome, all the best. πŸ™‚

    1. You are too kind. Thank you. πŸ™‚

  4. This is an excellent write!! Also, thank you so much for sharing your experiments with us, your audience. πŸ™‚

    1. My experiments sometimes blow up in my face, so hopefully you’ll be safe from where you are! πŸ˜‰

  5. You definetly have a way with words. Well put πŸ™‚πŸŒΌ

    1. Better than my actual speech, which can be borderline incoherent at times. πŸ™‚

      1. Well, We hear you heart and your heart speaks volumes! ❀🌺

  6. Shaken
    Braethtaken
    Great flow
    Couldn’t blink my brow

    1. Thank you, Michael. Love your impromptu rhymes. πŸ™‚

  7. I may try it out. Funny thing is, sometimes these challenges just make us learn how to write with new styles but we still need our bag of ideas to bbe full to the brim each time we try achieve something beautiful

    1. Absolutely agree. Well said! πŸ™‚

  8. So easy to be caught up in others’ opinions. It’s even worse if you never had a chance to discover who you are to start with. Good writing.

    1. It sounds like you have a very good understanding of this. πŸ™‚

  9. Really good poem. So much depth and realism. Losing sense of self so easy to lose, so hard to find again. It’s sad that many of us allow others to shame us, knowingly or not, into hiding our true selves to the point of sometimes losing who we are altogether…for better or worse… 😏

    1. What an eloquent comment. Thank you so much for your beautiful words. πŸ™‚

      1. Ur very welcome. I look forward to reading much more of ur work. πŸ’•

  10. Very nice. I love the villanelle. So glad you are perpetuating it!

    1. I’m trying to perpetuate! I’m trying. πŸ™‚

  11. You’re writing again! Thanks for liking my post.

    1. I saw a familiar shadowy face and thought I would amble over to get a better look. We’re both 5 years older, but you don’t look like you’ve aged a bit. Glad to see you again! πŸ™‚

  12. Damn! That’s all I have to say about that.

    Another challenge? You are very challenging. I like that.

    1. I try to do a challenge once a week. I am planning another one tomorrow…I think.

      1. I’m planning on catching up on my blog stuff today. I’m down to 31 emails. Most of that is blog stuff. I don’t think I’m going to catch up on challenges, though. I’ll get to them, though.

        1. No rush. They’re not going anywhere. πŸ™‚

  13. This is an amazing piece. My heart literally stopped as I kept reading. The burning meaning behind this poem is simply simple in its own perfect way.
    ‘You’ve lost your sense of self to lies,
    A shame since you’re its engineer.’
    Beautiful. Just beautiful

    1. You sense the meaning deeply, and I thank you for that, along with your lovely words. πŸ™‚

  14. We need more self-accountable, self-actualizing human engineers. Great work. Beautiful words!

    1. I agree about the need for more of those types of engineers. Thank you. πŸ™‚

  15. Bravo!! I always feel inspired to try a new form when I read your poety, Sonya. This is what I have been missing all these years. When I am finished my English assignments, I want to give it a try…this particular form sings to me. Beautifully written and profound words xx

    1. Ooo, I think the villanelle would be a good fit for your writing style! Now I can’t wait to read your villanelle! πŸ™‚

  16. Very nicely written. I love the flow and the thought.

    1. That’s very kind of you. Thank you so much. πŸ™‚

  17. I love the rhythm and melodic feel to the villanelle form. Though I’m not up for the challenge just now, I’ve an old one I wrote many years ago thst I might post sometime.

    1. I would love to read your villanelle! I find you really have to be in the mood to write one or it’s like pulling teeth. πŸ™‚

      1. I’ve just posted it over on my blog.

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